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The Long Essay is what you might consider a standard essay. You will be given a question, and might have to consider how history changed, or remained the same over time. Or, perhaps it’s an essay targeting the skill of comparison, or causation. Nonetheless, this essay will need a thesis and historical evidence to support that thesis. Your goal is to persuade the reader that your thesis is sound and well-supported by historical facts. Introduction and conclusion paragraphs are required.  You will be graded out of 6 points. You will write one of three choices (Periods 1-3, 4-6, or 7-9). Each choice will address both the same theme and reasoning skill.  







Your Score on the LONG ESSAY breaks down as follows:


Point 1 - Thesis

Similar to the DBQ, you must have an original thesis that reflects all parts of the task and the skill being targeted. If you just copy the statement they give you then ... SORRY!

NOTE: They may ask you to “Support, Modify, or Refute” a question. If this happens, on say, a “turning point” question:


Support Thesis: The New Deal was a turning point because...

Modify Thesis: Although the New Deal was a turning point because..., it also cannot be considered one, as...

Refute Thesis: The New Deal was not a turning point because...


NOTE: You can do any of three. If you choose to “Modify,” this might give you an opportunity to write more and show you can understand both sides of the argument!


Point 2- Contextualization

Similar to what was seen with the DBQ, you must show contextualization.







Guide to Writing an Effective Essay

[Note: For this example I will be using an essay written by me responding to: " Did life in the colonies to1750 reflect the values of freedom, justice, equality and republican government as was claimed by 1776?Consider social, economic, and political experiences of the colonists"]

Introduction Paragraph:

In my opinion

, this is the most important part of every essay. A strong introduction will set the reader'smood and attitude towards the essay in a positive direction while a weak opening paragraph can causelack of interest. First and foremost we need a hook or a sentence or two used to real the reader in.

“O’er the land of the free and the home of the brave!” (US National Anthem) is a phrase that most  Americans are familiar with. According to America's founders, freedom, liberty, equality and republican government were all words that reflected American values since the start of the colonies in Jamestown in1607.

Most people

are in fact familiar with this phrase and can relate to the essay. After we create a hook (for our purposes) we will write a thesis. The This is the main idea of the essay, stated in a single sentence,called the thesis statement. You must limit your entire essay to the topic you have introduced in your thesis statement. Your Thesis can be put anywhere within your essay but it is recomended to put it in your introduction for the sake of flow.

The colonies up to the year 1750 failed to demonstrate the values they proclaimed due to inequality for all people (especially blacks and women), limited freedom of religion, injustice to the innocent, and thecolonies being under the control of England.

The thesis clearly

states my opinion on the matter and includes all of the arguments I present within myessay. This thesis was written during an in class essay and litterally took about 30 seconds to come upwith. If you are writting a thesis for a take-home essay, it should include more advanced vocabulary. (Athesaurus is your best friend here!) After your thesis you should include a sentence or two as transitioninto your essay.

Compared to parts of Europe the colonies were actually farther behind in reflecting these values thanmost other countries.

Body Paragraphs:

Note that this

section is entitled "Body Paragraphs meaning there should be more than one. These paragraphs convey your main ideas, points, or analysis on the topic/question you are writting about. In myessay I had four body paragrphs (one for each argument I provided in my thesis). Each paragraph shouldinclude facts supporting your argument. These facts should be clear and concise and may be taken fromyour personal knowledge or from history. Due to the exam being an AP US History exam... you probablywant your facts to come from history. As long as you provide good historical insight and information inyour essays you should do well. Most teachers grading the exams will not take points off if you missed adate by a year or so. Here is my first body paragraph for reference:

Inequality was a major injustice of the colonies not only since their start but chiefly since 1619 whenthe first slave market arrived in Virginia. Slaves were by no means equal to any other group in society.


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